SCRIBBLES' Corner

Press, Volume LXXIV, Issue 22515, 24 September 1938, Page 4 (Supplement)

SCRIBBLES' Corner

’Some criticism and some help.

And here is the “Scribblers’ Corned’ again. This week Shipmates and Sunbeams’. contributions have been carefully read by Mrs W. Hueston. She Has given much time and thought to the work, and members will wish to express their thanks to her for her help. Only - a small number of criticisms is printed this week, but there will be another “Scribblers’ Corner’’ very soon. Here are some of the comments made by Mrs Hueston:

Murray' McKaskill; "The , Time Machine” (10/8/38). A clever picture of what might happen. -And Murray Is quite right. It is the children who are now growing up who have to play a tremendous part in preventing such a state of things as he describes. .’Mate Tarawera: All your contributions show imagination. "What the Kite. Saw” is a bright story. Keep on taring gnd don’t be afraid of cutting out unnecessary words.

Yvonne Watson: “Storm at Sea” Is good descriptive style. Practise this, using- as few words as possible. Even when you have cut your story down, you will usually find a word here and there- which can be deleted in the final polish. Good luck. Eeleii Ferguson: Eelen has a real story writer’s gift. "Hans and Gretchen” (30/4/38) is charming. 'Mate Black Cat: "Autumn Is Here”. Is quite a rythmical little poem. ’Mate Phantom: "The Night Express" (23/4/38). Realistically written. Judith Hanna: Your /Work shows imagination and a sense oL humour, Judith. "Music" is a happy little poem and 1 think Mr Milne would approve of “The Four Friends.” Keep on Bae Parker: Rae is, only eight but his paragraph "We Slid” (26/3/38) is cleverly constructed. This moans there are no useless words to take our attention away from the story he has to tf>n l.orna Stackhouse: “Shoes” (5/2/38) is pleasingly written for a little girl of nine. Keep on trying and I am sure you will realise your ambition to become a writer. Beverley Stoop (Oamaru): You have poetic thought and the gift of words, Beverley. Keep on trying. Margaret Blackler (Pleasant Point): Margaret selects new and original stories. You must practise hard, Margaret, for you have a good style. Keith Frampton: I like your stories and paragraphs, Keith. They, too, are original.

%OO9o£ OMm ’Slate Perth: Good imaginative work In your story “The Secret of the Ranch.” You have what writers call "a feeling for words.” I, like your verses, too. ’Hate Water sprite; “Twinkletoes — Dancer” (17/9/38). A neat and, amusing story. The paragraph before the final one is perhaps its weakest point. Prudence Mitchell: Your poems show rhythm -and imagination. You have the sense of words. ’Mate Allan: A jolly story, brightly told. ■ “Gently the brilliant colours faded. An ashy paleness followed, and in a white sky blazed the glory of that one splendid star ...” Yes, one can see that picture.

June Hill; I should like to see more of your work, June,- and am keeping a look out in ‘‘The Gay Gazette.” Valerie Barker: A keen eye for a story, Valerie. You have the Journalistic sense. I liked your poem, too.